After graduated from University of Social and Human Sciences,she has had the passion with teaching.She used to work at a famous hotel which is wanted to enter by lots of people with high salary.When she told her professor and her family about her plan which was saving all her money to build her own school to teach English,no one supported her and said that she must be dreamed.
But one year later,she did a thing which was thought that she just dreamed.She has her own school which is named after her nick name: Captain Bear School.She just teaches at home but the number of student is now more than 400.To encourage her students who love English,every one just have to paid fee for a class but he could enter any class that he wants.
And now she is preparing graduating with MA degree,then she will join in the PhD course.I admire her because of her passion with teaching,maybe a little bit of headstrong and her character.When i go to Captain Bear School,i don't feel like it's a strange place but a home,she is just like my sister,she shares everything to her students and through that,she gives a lot of her life's experiences.She inspires me to complete myself.
(The girl wearing pink dress is ms.Dung.)
P/S: Through this,i want to advice you that you should do what you have passion with,and of course thinking consider before you decided to do something.
Enjoy your day!!!thank for your reading!
Bless you!!!
So you are a special girl.
Trả lờiXóaThe paragraph is interesting but you should reduce relative clause so that it is completed.
i think your teacher is really an idol in your heart. through your writing, i can see your passion for that teacher. Surely that she will be very proud of you as her beloved and emotional student. Yet, there are some mistakes in your writing, personally i think. Now i will show you those mistakes:
Trả lờiXóa- After graduated from University of Social and Human Sciences(after graduating or after having graduated)
- no one supported her and said that she must be dreamed.( this sentence is really a mess. You 'd better change it because it may cause misunderstanding for everyone. "No one supported her and also no one said that...." so it should be "no one supported her and they all said that she was daydreaming" or "no one supported her and they all considered her thought just a dream")
- every one just have to paid fee for a class( i think it should be " every one just has to pay fee for a class")
- he could enter any class that he wants.( so just "he" could enter??? and how about the girls???)
- And now she is preparing graduating with MA degree,then she will join in the PhD course.( i think it should be " she is going to graduate with MA degree")
- I admire her because of her passion with teaching,maybe a little bit of headstrong and her character( "passion for teaching" "characteristic", i do read this sentence very carefully but to be honest it's too hard to understand????)
that is all i could see from your writing...if i have any mistakes, please forgive me...
GOOD LUCK TO YOU!
@:Vương Anh Nhân:wow!thanks for your comments.you know i checked those sentences on Word program,but it couldn't recognize...so you are better.when i do this essay,i have the emotion and just write,i forget making it shorter.
Trả lờiXóa-he could enter any class that he wants.( so just "he" could enter??? and how about the girls???)=>when you want to talk about an individual you say "he".it's not about the sex,just the using in English.
-i checked the dictionary,it "passion with something" not "for".
-thank you again!you helped me a lot.
bless you!!!
Nhân said all the things i want to say :)) so great :)) try your best huh :))
Trả lờiXóathis is Bích Nhi's blog, isnt it? ^^!
Trả lờiXóa- home teacher: why dont u use "tutor"?
- I think that after some adv: after, before, ... (I cant remember more.. :P) we use Ving: Ater graduating from...
^^! Love u... (Plz cm for me ^^!.. b/c no one cm for me :( )
Hello Nhi!
Trả lờiXóaYou seem tobe impressed by your teacher a lot and I think this is one of the reasons you choose English major.Is that right?
The first sentence, I think it is the sentence pattern 1 because I think the phrase "on a woman" is the prepositional phrase and the sentence "she has had the passion with teaching" is like the first sentence,it means this sentence is the sentence pattern 1.
Throught your paragraph,I really like your teacher!!!Goodbye
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